Hi, it's me again! As usual, this was great:)I love Gen, Sophos, and the Magus's interactions! Honestly, I'm not noticing the changes that you made, but I think that's actually a good thing. Whatever you modified or added blends so well with everything else that it seems like it was there from the beginning!
Oh, and I found a few more typos (though considering how long this fic is, there really aren't that many)
she tighten(ed) her grip
He'd probably kneel(keel) over and die from shock
Sophos's personal,(I'm not sure that there should be a comma here) security blanket.
Have you meet (met)him?”
“And have you meet (met) my cousins?”
Sorry it's taking me sooooo long to read this, we were out of power for three days, and since all my homework has to be done on the computer, I'm really behind, so a chapter a day is all I can manage! But I really want to read it...I'm working on it!
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Honestly, I'm not noticing the changes that you made, but I think that's actually a good thing. Whatever you modified or added blends so well with everything else that it seems like it was there from the beginning!
Oh, and I found a few more typos (though considering how long this fic is, there really aren't that many)
she tighten(ed) her grip
He'd probably kneel(keel) over and die from shock
Sophos's personal,(I'm not sure that there should be a comma here) security blanket.
Have you meet (met)him?”
“And have you meet (met) my cousins?”
Sorry it's taking me sooooo long to read this, we were out of power for three days, and since all my homework has to be done on the computer, I'm really behind, so a chapter a day is all I can manage! But I really want to read it...I'm working on it!